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Hi student 2 - I did like your poem! Great way to look at an everyday object in a new way. I'm curious as to whether this is the only way that you feel about this object or whether you were just exploring one potential feeling? --Teacher

Student 2 - Ha! I read your poem after you revised it, but I went through the history and read the original too. I like the first draft better. This draft is a little too ambivalent. You may not feel completely about your kindle the way you expressed in the first draft, but it was more fun to read. I enjoyed the cynicism. Maybe you could consider something between the two? Another stanza or something instead of changing the tone? ---Student1

Student 2 - My mom got me a kindle for Christmas, and I liked it enough that I bought my best friend one when he was feeling down. He really likes to read. You don't like yours? How come? --Student3

Student 2 - I'm not sure how this turned out. I'm don't know if I gave you the right advice, in retrospect. Maybe we could work on trying to change this entirely, to show you feel but also have the writing be powerful, for the final draft. ---Teacher

Here is my poem. I hope you like it. --- I just revised the poem to try and reflect a less harsh side to how I feel about my kindle.

I've always wanted the chance to read things that I didn't care about and I thought weren't very good for free.

For $80 you too can buy a machine that allows you to download any book you want for free if you know how to use bittorrent and read it in your sweatpants and t-shirt on your couch while eating laughing cow cheese.

Recently I read all Chelsea Handler's books in one day and Middlesex, which was not nearly good enough to win a Pulitzer.

I'm considering reading Stephen King's newest novel, which is otherwise incredibly expensive, and I know perfectly well that I would never pay that much for a pop novel. The Stand was okay, but generally I'd hate him entirely except he lives in Maine and I like Maine.

The Kindle! It enables reading of modern literature for those who have taste. You know that the newest novel is no Hemingway but all your friends are talking about it. Buy a kindle. download books for free, and now you can read all those things you didn't have time for in the first place.